A Level Portfolio Project. Day 8: The Script

            like a fart in the wind, I have NOT VANISHED and have returned with my bloggy know-how. I wrote the script, the story was my idea and im gonna be credited as the main writer so it makes sense. Now it took me quite a while to finish the script, partially due to complications at my home, paritally due to college prep stuff, partially due to a whole other short film that I will likely talk about at least once in my blog, but almost entirely due to laziness on my end, self awareness may be a good coping mechanism for being bad at your passion but it's not the script SO LET'S GET ON TO IT!

    Here is the first version of the script, it sucks, plain and simple. I have a method for writing my scripts, sometimes I can just waste an entire day of brainstorming by not writing anything down and sometimes I write a 22 page script on a train that directly influenced this one! However, I could not get the juices flowing, and added with all of my half-assed procrasination excuses with an added layer of uncertainty as to what we wanted the story to be lead to, well this. I'd love to pick and laugh at how much of a failure this first draft was (Sidenote, at first I thought this script would be so good I wouldn't even need another draft, hilarious I know.) I literally wrote "ensue montage," my sister taught me how to write a montage in a screenplay and I just forgot, so instead of asking her I just hoped for the best. Theres a lack of real characters and motivation, there is basically no rising action, there are technically 3 acts but more accurately there are 3 scenes with the vague notion of there being montages, overall this script was not going to work.

    Next draft was pretty good though.  I will NOT take sole credit for this draft being a vast improvement from the last, that credit goes to my whole team who all huddled around and chipped out a much better version of the story. Now to toot my own horn, I was the one who came up with all the new scenes but it was a group effort to figure out what we wanted to flesh out which each scene, mainly characters. My first script does a terrible job at showing why Otto even chooses to join the evil, spooky, calf religion, however  the new scene introducing Mable better shows this with subtler and more fufilling dialogue, along side smaller additional changes.

    Now another version of the script was made but it's almost identical to the first so I'll save it for later, for now I'll say something wicked this way comes!

heres the best joke I wound up cutting from the script, it was too edgy to the point of being a bit lame and possibly lean on offensive and it was too complicated to have someone say out loud, it would have been less of a joke you may only catch on rewatch and more of a "huh wait, what does that mean" kind of thing.